Term+1+writing

=For writing this term we have been writing exposition writing about the pros and cons of having Music, Dance ,Drama and Sport.= = = =We have also been writing Four Picture stories which means that you have four pictures and you can make up a story as long as you include the pictures. Here is my story = = = === Ranger Joe woke nice and e arly to a brigh t American Sun shining from the heavens on to his face, this was his last few hours at the ranger academy and he wanted to enjoy them, first with a little lie in. But of course like every other morning at 0700 hours on the dot the maid knocked on the door and called out “wakey wakey the sun is shining you are wasting daylight”. === = = = So with bleary eyes Joe got out of bed and stumbled downstairs mumbling “ coffee coffee” and there was the tea lady like always standing there patiently waiting with a steaming cup of coffee in her safe hands. He drank it cautiously to make sure it was not to hot or cold, today it was just right,after testing the coffee Joe went and sat down with all the other trainees. = = = = Five minutes later Joe heard a tinkling sound in the distance and exclaimed out loud “ I can hear Julie” and sure enough one minute later the camp commander walked through the door and the bells on her riding boots suddenly grew much louder. Everybody looked around and called out cheery hello’s and hi’s,she walked up to the front of the room, then she announced “ Today is a great day for our new organization, for our first ranger, Joe is being recruited. And he is being appointed to ... Africa the Sahara Desert” and Joe thought that was good enough and then thought ahead to his big job of packing. = = = = Four hours later he was standing with Julie making small talk because he was so nervous. Then out of the corner of his eye he saw a small dark skinned man walking towards them he was about five foot two with a name tag pinned to his chest reading Nasri, Joe’s guide had arrived. = = = = When he had met Nasri and Joe had said goodbye to Julie he walked into the boarding room and sat down ten minutes later he heard through the speakers above his head “ flight seven nine two please board now at gate number five” and he got up and heaved his rucksack on to his back and told Nasri to come. = = When they got to gate number five they boarded found their seats and settled down for a long Ten hour flight to an Air Force Base in a secret location in the Sahara Desert. = = = = When they got there Joe and Nasri stepped out in to a stifling heat of Thirty Eight degrees celsius, Joe wasn’t used to this sort of heat but he knew that he would just have to put up with it because he would be working in this for the next few months or so. When they had taken in there immediate surroundings they saw an important looking man that looked really annoyed to be there also looking like he had somewhere more important to be at that time but when he saw them he put on a Mr Nice Guy smile and welcomed them into Africa. He told them that a two days walk was required to get to the village where the reported smuggling was happening. He told them that it would be good to set out early the next morning and walk a good distance until it got to hot and then walk some more in the afternoon. = = = = So they got escorted to some modern looking buildings over the far side of the airfield and shown their rooms which were very simple with just a bed and a chair all their food would be supplied downstairs. For tea they had Instant Mashed Potato, Soggy Peas and Tinned Corned Beef, Joe was horrified by the food if he was going to be given that tomorrow he would surely not survive the day. = = = = They went to bed at about Nine Thirty and Joe to his surprise slept very easily until Seven Thirty for the first time in Five Months. Joe got dressed and knocked lightly on Nasri’s door he could not hear anything so he went in and saw Nasri slumped down with his head on his chest. Joe gasped and went a little closer and saw a bit of paper tucked under his arm he went closer and got the bit of paper it said We hav alredy struc kep comin an we wil get u The Smugs. Joe gasped again and said out loud to himself “ That must of been from the smugglers somebody must have tipped them of” then Nasri started to mumble and wake up and Joe turned turned back to reality he went downstairs to find help he found everyone else slumped against each other with bits of paper under their arms. Joe thought it was best to get moving just in case the Smugglers came back. So he went in to the Kitchen and got a bucket of cold water to tip on Nasri to wake him up. But when he got there Nasri wasn’t there and Joe nearly killed himself with thinking how he could have let him get taken when he looked over to the window and the amazing scenes of the desert outside calmed but then he looked down and thought that Nasri could have been taken through this window. = = = = Suddenly Joe heard a sound behind him and turned around expecting a fight but it was only... Nasri. Joe was puzzled and asked straight away where he had been, Nasri said he had “just been to the toilet down the hallway” and relief flooded over Joe, he said “I thought you had been taken by the smugglers” and had to explain everything and tell him that they should go. = = = = Three hours later Joe and Nasri had been walking for an hour and needed a break, then Nasri and Joe spotted something in the distance Joe squinted but couldn’t quite make it out they walked for another hour or two and then they could finally make it out it was a desert oasis and they welcomed it with open arms, they were tired and thirsty and needed a break. Joe decided to stay the night at the oasis and started collecting firewood for a big fire. He had been trained and had already known that it turns from very hot to very cold in about half an hour in the desert. = = = = At Eleven O Clock the next day Joe and Nasri stopped behind some rocks for the rest of the day. Four hours later they got shakily to their feet and carried on for another two hours. Joe could see a dark smudge on the horizon and said to himself that must be the village he knew that they would have to get there in the next hour or two or they would have to stay another night in the desert, and with no wood in sight it would be very cold and they might not be able to survive. = = = = One hour later they got into the outskirts of the village and kept walking until they got to a big square. There were some people standing nearby looking like they were waiting for someone. Joe and Nasri walked over to them and said “hello” and they answered back saying they were the village officials and told Joe that they were waiting for them. The next morning at Six O clock they got woken up sharply by a small budgie with a spoon in it’s claws flying around the room squawking. They got up knowing they might be back in this bed that night or maybe dead. When they got into the main room of the tent they were told everything about the smugglers like: There are Twelve of them, all men and only have pistols and daggers to defend themselves with. The village chief gave Joe his most prized possession a rifle since Joe had no weapons. = = = = Two hours later Joe and Nasri had somehow walked out of the stifling hot desert and into Kilimanjaro National Park where the villagers said the smugglers were. Nasri and Joe walked tensely for hours on end suddenly Joe pulled Nasri down to the ground just in time. Crashing through the trees came three men they were talking loudly between themselves. They were saying “ we’ll get those villagers to tell us everything about those rangers with all this food from the boss” and another guy said “ I reckon we should stop off and eat some of this” and the third person snapped back “ No what happens if someone catches us”. The men passed and then Joe said to Nasri“ we better get going now maybe there is a path leading to the base”. Sure enough, following the broken bushes and branches of the mens off path rampage Joe and Nasri found a path. = = = = For another time consuming hour Joe and Nasri walked along the path talking to each other quietly about there surroundings. Joe spotted a green Macaw flying out of a bush on his left and Nasri spotted a small tree with toadstools growing up the side with dew dripping down the toadstools. = = = = After another half an hour Joe and Nasri started to hear voices calling out to each other in the Jungle to their sides. Then Joe and Nasri turned a corner crawling and gasped, in front of them over a little rise the layout was: A two story building facing them, to the left of that was a whole block of buildings that looked just the same as each other, At the back was another two buildings and around the fringes were little bunker houses every One Hundred meters or so, everywhere they looked there seemed to be men but Joe counted only nine. = = = = Nasri and Joe observed all this for a minute or two, Then Joe said “ We better move round to the other side of the camp and see if we can get in there” so that’s what they did. = = = = One hour later Joe and Nasri got there. Joe had also thought of a plan to capture all the smugglers without injuring them and hopefully neither themselves. = = = = So ten minutes later they were both setting out on there different ways wishing each other good luck. Joe headed to his left to wait, he found a comfortable place and was ready for the signal when it came. He knew that he would only get one minute to get up take a couple of deep breaths before running as fast as he could to the other side of the camp. Meanwhile Nasri had gone of to his right so that eventually himself and Joe would be roughly facing each other. He walked through the bush and found a tree stump that had a good view of the whole camp. Five minutes later Nasri stumbled to his feet and loosened off then he headed of downhill getting some homemade explosives out of his pocket at the same time. When he got to the outskirts of the smugglers camp Nasri kneeled down and set the explosives, then he reached into the other pocket where a big seashell was, Nasri took a couple of deep breaths looked around to make sure no one was watching then blew with all his might once twice three short shrill blasts on the seashell. Once he had done that Nasri struck a match and lit the explosives he also timed them for thirty seconds. = = = = At the same time that Nasri had blown once on the seashell, Joe was getting up and hefting a small rucksack and the rifle on to his back( he had left his other gear with Nasri’s at the back of the camp ) then Joe took ten big breaths and raced down the hill. Joe clambered over rocks and crushed small saplings dodging big, small, fat and skinny trees at the same time. = = = = When he got out into the smugglers camp there was three men he saw immediately but bound to be more Joe thought to himself. The men gave a shout and clumsily pulled guns out of holsters and tried to shoot him down, but Joe ran in zig-zags, still going to the same place. When Joe was nearing the edge of the bush he thought to himself I’m going to make it, he was getting nearer and nearer but then Joe felt a sharp pain shooting down his arm and cried in pain the men cheered but stopped as soon as they saw Joe wasn’t stopping. Joe burst into the bush were he immediately saw Nasri scrabbling higher up the hill, then Joe saw the explosives and remembered he hadn’t quite made it. = = = = Joe ran up the hill his thighs burning his heart pumping hard. Suddenly Joe heard the men bursting through the bush behind him and urged himself to go on, then he heard a loud beeping sound and threw himself to the ground hands covering his head. Then there was a bang and a smoky sound quickly spreading around the camp Nasri came back down knife in hand and Joe had his rifle ready just in case not everyone had got knocked out but they needn’t worry because there lying in a neat heap were the Nine bodies of the men. Nasri thought they looked dead but Joe remembered the villagers saying they are knock out explosives. Joe and Nasri disarmed the men and trussed them up so hard that not even someone with a knife could of got out. Then Nasri hauled over them to some bare ground and dropped them there while getting out a satellite phone and calling the locals to tell them to bring a chopper to get the smugglers and them. = = = = Meanwhile Joe entered the closest building looking for any evidence of smuggling after getting into the third building he got up onto the second level and saw a red door he walked over to it and tried the handle it was locked but there was a key next to the door and it fit, Joe opened the door and saw a few different animals he quickly closed the door and opened the door more slowly and slipped in, there were green macaws five, two leopards in separate pens, there were two other birds that Joe could not name and fifteen or so other animals but the most stand out was a cat snuggled up with a turtle at Joe’s feet. Joe decided to leave them all for evidence. = = = = He jogged downstairs out to where he last saw Nasri, And told him the good news the he knew what the smugglers were smuggling, Rare Animals. Suddenly Joe heard a sound in the distance and knew that it was all over. Three minutes later Joe and Nasri could both hear and see the helicopter, it was right above there heads now and coming in to land Three meters Two meters One meter and landed two commandos jumped down and told them to lie face down to make sure that it was really them, then an official got out and told them they could get up after checking with some questions. Another five commandos jumped out and put the smugglers into the helicopter while they were doing that Joe said to the official “ there is a few endangered animals in that two story building over there” and the official said “we’ll come back and pick them up, oh yes thank you very much, this is a reward for what you have done for the locals from them and us”. Joe was handed a small velvet box and one to Nasri they opened it and in Joe’s was some photos of there journey and the same in Nasri’s. Then Joe asked “how did you get these” and the official answered back “this was kind of a test, from now on your job gets much harder”. = = = = The End =

= We had to write fractured Fairy tales with our peers our buddies wrote back positive feedback: =

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Rapunzel and the Three Evil Bears ====== Starting date: 16/3/11  Finished date:

 Once upon a time a long, long time ago in a kingdom no one really knows about lived a beautiful girl called, Rapunzel. Rapunzel lived in a small cottage with her Mum, her Dad and little brother he was called Jimmy. Rapunzel’s parent’s weren’t rich unlike most of the other people in their neighbour in fact they were quite the opposite, her Dad was his own boss working in a small shoe the shop was just down the lane the shop was called ‘last foot wear’.

 One day Rapunzel was skipping down the cobbled lane to her fathers shoe shop when a mysterious stranger stopped a cart right in front of her, she skidded to a halt and was just about to say something so rude when that stranger surprised her by talking first, he said “ hello there Missy I heard you liked chocolate caramel buns” “OMG how did you know that chocolate caramel buns are my Achilles heel” “well I can read minds” “how can you possibly read minds, that has got to be impossible”. Not if you are a stranger who has a cart filled with chocolate caramel buns” “Rapunzel gasped and said “really”, “well of course I do my dear”answered back the stranger.”Then the Stranger said “if you come with me you can have all the chocolate caramel buns you want”. “OK” Rapunzel said. Then the stranger said “if you just hop in here with me I’ll show you how many buns I have” Rapunzel got in because she had never got told not to get in a cart with a stranger.

 When they got out into the countryside the stranger was talking happily with Rapunzel when he pretended to reach over her to get something then suddenly he grabbed her and shouted out “ Benjiman, Franklin now” and out of the pile of chocolate caramel buns jumped two great big bears they jumped on her and held her down. At the same time the stranger started to take off his clothes and skin Rapunzel gasped when he peeled off his skin revealing a brown fur like the bears...the Stranger was another bear. When all the bears had discussed what they would do they left her in the cart and and went outside for a smoke and a chinwag with each other.

 When they came back they hopped in the cart and took her to their house. When they got to their house they made plans to eat her. While they were talking Rapunzel overheard them and started to think of a plan so she could escape from them. Two hours later Benjiman came for her but Rapunzel was ready for him, She had found a frying pan in with the buns she had got it out and then she gave him one round the face that smacked into next week. Then while the other two where inside waiting for Benjiman they saw Rapunzel running for their Harley. The Bears weren’t ready for this so they took a full minute to react by the time they tried to dive out the door to catch onto the exhaust pipe she was speeding away to the Police Station Twenty Ks away. When she got to the police station she told the closest dwarf what happened and he went to the cops and told them what happened. After they had captured the bears Rapunzel rode home and opened the saddle bags to reveal her little secret... 250 chocolate caramel buns in each saddle bag, altogether 500 hundred chocolate caramel buns for her to enjoy by herself.

 The End. By Liam and Chester

Sam L : I think this story was well written and I liked how it used the three bears and Rapunzel.

 It was quite funny in some parts.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Arial Black'; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> It could have been a bit longer but it was good. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Arial Black'; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> Well done.

<span style="background-color: #00ff00; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">Jordan: I reckon this was great it had a good storyline. I like how Rupenzul knocked the bear into next week!! lol. Not to long, not to short... Perfect.